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John. Posted 9 months ago
I am not sure how my poems will be received here as I tend to write in a slightly ‘old fashioned’ way. Here is one I wrote a few months ago.

A Winter Meeting. © John Marsh.

The grass was frozen, crystal silver.

Trees stood black against the sky.

Paths, well trodden lay before me

As the day began to die.

Autumn, with its yellows, reds

And burnished gold, was now long past.

The glory of its flaming bushes

Laid to waste by winter’s blast.

Back I turned into the forest

In the fast approaching gloam

Conscious of a distant birdsong

As I turned my face for home.

A little robin braved the cold,

(The migrant birds had long since flown),

And sang his high, defiant song

As winter’s chill cut to the bone.

In the vastness of the cosmos,

Through the realms of time and space

Where countless stars and planets orbit,

He and I stood face to face.

While distant worlds were lost to forces

Unimaginably strong.

While stars burned out, collapsed, exploded,

I listened to his cheerful song.

Both of us set on this pathway

At the very start of time,

Made from stardust, to evolve

And fill the Master plan sublime.

Little robin, sing out loudly

As I walk my homeward mile.

Winter passes, spring will follow.

Once again the earth will smile.

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    • LawrieL 18th May 2021 at 9:04 am

      If this is “old fashioned” then I like old fashioned. This poem is breautiful and profound. The picture you paint is clear (without need for interpretation), to simply immerse yourself and enjoy. I enjoyed it very much!

    • Nan Smith 18th May 2021 at 12:59 pm

      Beautifully written, it flows so smoothly.

    • Heleng 18th May 2021 at 3:07 pm

      Just lovely.

    • Pixi 18th May 2021 at 3:28 pm

      Well done, I really enjoyed this. Painting a picture with words!

    • Julia Umm Humaid 18th May 2021 at 4:54 pm

      A well written poem. I walked that winter walk with you. Thank you!

    • Colin in Kent 18th May 2021 at 5:06 pm

      Excellent! You control the metre and rhyme perfectly, but never lose sight of the subject of the meeting, and the cold winter surroundings. I’m trying to think who it reminds me off, but it’s excellent nevertheless.

    • eriley01 18th May 2021 at 8:06 pm

      Loved your poem quite beautiful thankyou for sharing it

    • Artemis 18th May 2021 at 9:45 pm

      Interesting choice of rhyme scheme ABCB Called (I think) unbounded or ballad quatrain. Rime of the Ancient Mariner is a well known example – although Taylor creates separate 4 line verses – and you have made your lovely offering continuous. I like the way that this gives it a pleasing flow. I must say I have never tried that particular rhyme scheme, I tend toward the rather mundane ABAB – or if I am feeling bold AAAA

      • John. 19th May 2021 at 8:25 am

        Thank you Artemis.
        I have never paid any attention to the structure of poetry to be honest.
        I just write what comes into my head and what ‘feels’ right.
        I have always enjoyed poetry. Even as a little boy I got joy from some poems that I read.

        • Artemis 19th May 2021 at 10:31 pm

          You clearly have a natural feel for rhythm – something which many folk really have to work at. Indeed, your offering has made me very nervous about ever posting anything of my own – I am afraid Colin might see it as just “light verse”!

    • juleswalker 18th May 2021 at 10:15 pm

      It’s a lovely poem. I was ‘there’ as I read it and poems should do that for you.

    • Paul_ 19th May 2021 at 2:07 am

      Excellent work!

      ‘Gloam’, great word, haven’t heard that for a long time!

      • John. 19th May 2021 at 8:30 am

        Thanks Paul.
        Yes, ‘gloam’ is a word that’s largely fallen into disuse of late.
        (As I made this reply, even my spell checker just changed it to ‘gloom’).

    • Deleted User 19th May 2021 at 7:16 am

      Yes beautifully written full of description well done 👍🏼

    • VFP 19th May 2021 at 7:25 am

      Beautiful poem!

    • [email protected] 19th May 2021 at 2:19 pm

      I like it, has a lovely smooth flow to it.

    • Suzydiamond 23rd May 2021 at 5:02 pm

      Beautiful poem.Thanks for sharing.

    • LUCYJORDAN 31st July 2021 at 2:33 pm

      That!!! Is beautiful.

      My idea of what poetry should be.

    • Moya 1st August 2021 at 8:58 am

      It’s timeless, not ‘old-fshioned’. Write on.

    • Artemis 1st August 2021 at 1:06 pm

      From winter to summer:

      A summer shower

      A rapid shower had cooled the air,
      Bringing a freshness everywhere.
      From leaves the drips fell to the ground,
      Sweet echoes of the shower’s sound.
      And soon across the woods I heard
      First one and then a second bird.
      Still more joined in – a joyous throng
      Blessing the shower with their song.
      Then as once more the sun’s hot ray
      Shone out to warm this summer’s day
      I saw the mist-like vapours rise,
      And butterflies, blue as the skies,
      Flitting across the flowery dell,
      As still the last few droplets fell.
      The clouds had passed me by, but still
      They lingered o’er a nearby hill,
      Pouring down their waters grey
      Before they moved and went their way.
      Yet through the rain across the sky
      The sunbeams shot, and there on high
      The beauteous colours curved to form
      A rainbow, from that summer storm

    • Wendia 4th August 2021 at 9:39 am

      Really loved your poem, very evocative of the time of year.

    • Mark123 22nd August 2021 at 2:41 pm

      Very good poem with plenty of metaphor and imagery with good rhythm, and very enjoyable to read.

    • Mark123 22nd August 2021 at 2:43 pm

      Another good one.

    • Artemis 24th August 2021 at 4:23 pm

      Mark if “another good one” means mine thank you, the only comment I have had, I am sorry to say

      • Sandy 63 30th October 2021 at 7:00 pm

        Keep up the imagination your expression is worthy of time and emotional feelings

      • Colin in Kent 30th October 2021 at 7:10 pm

        Hello Artemis. I have only just caught up on this thread owing to Sandy’s comment below. Notifications don’t seem to show if you’re not the person replied to directly. Anyway, your poem is beautiful, the simplicity is deceptive and reminds me of early Wordsworth or Coleridge, who used their rhyme to comment quite profoundly on the natural world, as this does.

        • Artemis 30th October 2021 at 7:34 pm

          Thank you Colin. To be mentioned in the same sentence as Wordsworth and Coleridge is very pleasing. A lot of my current output is about the destruction of our natural world, and much of it tends to be what I would call a “green Pam Ayres” style – rather more rumpty tumpty

        • Colin in Kent 30th October 2021 at 10:57 pm

          Brilliant – maybe that’s what the world needs now, a green Pam Ayres! I can see that as a very British response to Greta Thunberg!

          I hope we see more of your work.

        • Artemis 31st October 2021 at 12:28 pm

          You are very kind. Choose a green/save our earth subject and I will search my cache.

        • Colin in Kent 31st October 2021 at 2:45 pm

          I love anything to do with the natural world, or the vanishing countryside of Britain, from forests, meadows, woodland, rivers, heather and heathland. Anything you have in that vein will be a pleasure to read.

        • Artemis 31st October 2021 at 5:07 pm

          In 1912, sitting in a café in Berlin, Rupert Brooke wrote a nostalgic poem about the old vicarage, his home in Grantchester – and a much loved and quoted couplet entered the English language. I am sure most of you know it

          “Stands the church clock at ten to three?
          And is there honey still for tea ?
          Bees are responsible for much more than just some honey for our toast, and Brooke’s yearning for lilacs and chestnuts struck a chord – which resulted in this view of a possible future without bees.

          (from “The Old Vicarage Grantchester” by Rupert Brooke 1912 )

          Close your eyes and think of spring
          Swallows swooping on the wing.
          Cherry blossom pink and white,
          Nesting birds a cheerful sight
          Ladies smock in hedge’s shade
          Bluebells carpet woodland glade
          Dappled sunlight warms and cheers
          Fresh green leaves with dew-drop tears

          Picture a balmy summer day,
          Buzz of bees and smell of hay
          Apples ripening on the trees,
          Butterflies dancing on the breeze.
          Poppies nodding in the corn,
          Bright red jewels to greet the morn.
          Tiny field mice scamper here
          Kestrel gives them cause for fear

          Now let autumn come to mind
          And all around you you will find
          Berries and fruit on bush and tree,
          Feasts for creatures wild and free.
          Squirrel seeks the nuts he’ll need
          When winter comes with icy speed.
          Snuffling hedgehog cannot stay
          He seeks a winter hideaway

          Open your eyes and changed the scene,
          No sign of things which once had been.
          There is a pallor in the air,
          The fruit trees everywhere are bare.
          No skylark’s song, no blackbird’s trill,
          The woods and fields are sad and still.
          The flowers are gone, the grass is bare,
          There’s desolation everywhere.

          In vain small hungry creatures search
          For food, where starving sparrows perch
          No nuts or berries as before
          Vanished is Nature’s bounteous store.
          Our tables too hold Spartan fare
          Without the bees’ industrious care
          We did not save the little bee…
          Can there be honey still for tea ?

        • Colin in Kent 1st November 2021 at 5:14 pm

          Again, wonderful Artemis, very well constructed and visualised and yet still powerful and quietly important. You should post in your own thread so people see them – I’m sure plenty would appreciate these.

        • Artemis 1st November 2021 at 6:10 pm

          I have been thinking of altering the last line to say ” There won’t be very much for tea” because it is not the honey bee per se which is under severe threat it is all the bees and insects. What do you think ?

          I had no idea that I had my own thread or how to find it. Still uncertain as to how it works or how I go there.

        • Colin in Kent 1st November 2021 at 7:38 pm

          Well, if you click on Poetry on the right hand side, the first thing you’ll see it will say ‘Create a Post’, and you can then start one of your own, or you can do that in any interest section. Or have a separate post for each poem, which is what I do.

          Well, of course, the poem is your own and your own voice, and that is one of the joys of wrestling with these things. The only thing I would say is that you don’t need explicitly to reference bees AND insects, and all the growing things, because the bee is standing in for all of those things in the medium of the poem, commenting on Brooke’s sentiment but showing that in just a century we have put not only the quaint tea, but everything that goes with it at risk. Actually, the other thing I would say is that the vanishing of the bee (in the poem’s imagination) is not a matter of ‘will we save it’, rather – ‘we did not’, and therefore the last line should perhaps not be a question but a certainty ‘we did not save the little bee / no honey now, nor fruit, nor tea.’ or ‘no honey now for ladies’ tea’ or something that shows the consequence of the loss rather than what is perhaps a weakening of the sentiment but suggesting things might still be alright. Just my tuppence, it is *your* poem!

        • Artemis 1st November 2021 at 8:00 pm

          Thank you for your kindness. The reason I considered removing the “honey” mention is that it only covers a very small part of what we will lose if bees go. We could actually manage (just) without honey, but not without all the other things they pollinate. That is why I thought of there being very little for our tea.

        • Colin in Kent 1st November 2021 at 8:15 pm

          Yes, quite true! It is, as I say, your poem, and your thoughts and intentions for it are what’s important.

    • Kesa 3rd October 2021 at 12:04 pm

      This is a delight. You have a, real talent.

    • Sandy 63 30th October 2021 at 6:56 pm

      Poetry seems to be a loss of communication many people have forgotten how words and imagination can brighten up a person’s day . Carry on expressing your feelings and imagination. You did a brilliant job. Regards Sandra

    • Sandy 63 30th October 2021 at 7:05 pm

      Guys being poet is a good thing. Gives people time to consider that the written word and heartfelt imagination are to be truly appreciated. This modern world of computers tend to make us lose that human touch. Keep up the good work gentlemen. We all need time to relax and reflect. Thank you guys

    • Nan Smith 31st October 2021 at 11:40 am

      Very descriptive. A pleasure to read.

    • James.murph 10th January 2022 at 7:41 am

      I really enjoyed that walk through your poem.
      It makes you think of the events happening around you.

    • Vivien Astin 12th January 2022 at 8:30 pm

      Liked your poem very much,how you described the seasons and how mankind has walked this earth since the beginning of time.When you referred to your homeward mile,it made me think that your were returning to your maker.Liked the line of how the earth will smile.Will post one of mine in the next few days. Thank you John

    • Vivien Astin 12th January 2022 at 8:39 pm

      Don’t think my reply made it through.i loved the title and how you described the seasons.It took me on a journey through time.When you wrote about your homeward made it made me think that you were going to meet your maker.It left me with a warm feeling.Thank you John.I will post one of mine in the next few days.Vivien

    • Moya 12th January 2022 at 9:51 pm

      Put your poetry out with pride. Write for yourself and treasure the fact you can do it.. It’s such a mind-enhancing thing to do. What’s old-fashioned about observing nature? If you’ve found ‘your’ style then learn how you can enhance it. Experiment and have fun. Well done, John.

    • Artemis 18th January 2022 at 9:50 pm

      I find it almost impossible to work out which of the poems a comment is about, unless the writer is named. because as the comments all arrive they are not placed under whatever it is they are commenting on. I think it is perhaps because some folk just post, instead of using “Reply”